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Click the red 'x' and close this window.
  Close this that resembles my life.
A shaded world wields the hottest winds,
  I feel anything but alright.

You baffle me --
     with your chocolate hair,
    when mine beams in the sunlight...
You startle me --
     with your dominoes,
       that fall into my life.

I can't escape, I've come to terms with that.

That arrow you shot in my heart
    long ago,
   I wish you would stop playing with it.
When I tore it out
   I cut some chord
    but it doesn't work if you
    start filling the pit.

Run my feet across the water
Run my mind across this world.
   Act casual
   and tell nothing.

...

You're the only one who understands me
   When you pretend I don't exist
because I don't.
        I'm too real.
©2008-2009 =RedEarthofTerra
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The 3rd in my A - Z collection, the name of which I've stopped giving.

Jessa Rose :blackrose:
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:D Thanks again!

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"Somehow, everything's gonna fall right into place. (If we only had a way to make it all fall faster everyday."
-Paramore

Jessa Rose :blackrose: :rose:
:) :thanks:

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"Somehow, everything's gonna fall right into place. (If we only had a way to make it all fall faster everyday."
-Paramore

Jessa Rose :blackrose: :rose:
Amazing mon cher! It is a really interesting idea you have going there and I like the flow of the passages.

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"C'est une bonne chose I vous aiment toujours, parce que j'aurai toujours un orange et le rouge a monté pour vous donner avec un baiser."
the begining was a great way to start, straight away had me asking 'why'.

the rest of the poem, totally fitting imagery :heart:

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Dum spiro spero.
:) Thanks much.

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"Somehow, everything's gonna fall right into place. (If we only had a way to make it all fall faster everyday."
-Paramore

Jessa Rose :blackrose: :rose:
Merci! :)

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"Somehow, everything's gonna fall right into place. (If we only had a way to make it all fall faster everyday."
-Paramore

Jessa Rose :blackrose: :rose:

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